- MemberNovember 2, 2020 at 9:50 pm
Denise, I’ve already told you how I love this set up – and you’re off to a strong start with your hook – but I would agree that it you need to give us more about who Julep is. Also, do you need to mention the ex at all? Does his passing have a significant effect on Julep that he needs to get mentioned in the hook or is he just there to tell us who the dog is from? How about…
“Julep O’Neal, a ________________, inherits a retired cadaver dog, only this K9 won’t stay retired. When he drags Julep into solving the murder of her cantankerous next door neighbor, ________________________ [some statement about the stakes at hand, or challenge she faces, etc.]”
Hope that helps in some small way.
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