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    Chris Lowenstein

    October 28, 2020 at 3:03 am

    Hi Darren, I was intrigued by this hook. I love stories with a school setting and with a historical aspect, so I’d be inclined to check this book out. I agree with what Adam said — the fourth bale was a bit out of nowhere and since I didn’t know what it refers to, it didn’t make sense to me. While Adam pointed out that readers might want to know why the random impossible creature and three lawless men are pursuing Oliver, what I inferred (perhaps incorrectly) when I read the blurb was that the sixteenth century lawless men and creature have shown up at the school and Oliver is the one who happens to find them, and so must confront them or organize a defense of some kind. If that is the case, then you probably do need a couple words that explains how these sixteenth century time travelers came to be at the school. Good luck with this book. I look forward to reading more about it.