- MemberOctober 26, 2020 at 3:05 am
I like your hook. I think others may have suggested the same, but do we need to know that “Victorian London’s frozen”? To me, the setting of Victorian London seems important for the hook, but the frozen part does not. I’m glad we get Jack’s name, but I also wish we could get a little bit more information about the burglary. What is being stolen and why is it so important that someone would want to set Jack up or kill him to cover up the crime? It’s nicely written, but leaves me wondering what the crux of the book is.
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