- MemberOctober 16, 2020 at 1:30 am
This is great! I’m actually sitting forward in my seat, leaning in. 🙂 I think Darren is on the right track: dropping the dash and maybe starting the next sentence indicating “To keep her powers safe / out of others’ hands, Rako goes on the run. The only way she can stay alive is to seek help from the monsters themselves.”
And thanks to Liz, who reminded me of “irony” in hooks/ log lines / tag lines!
I have another suggestion, in an attempt to make a book hook the very fewest number of words as possible: Hunted by power hungry competitors, a newly minted monster hunter goes on the run. To stay alive, she’ll need help from the monsters themselves.
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