MemberOctober 16, 2020 at 1:06 am
The first / stand-alone line is great. Sounds like a clean, tight book hook.
I would look at the second bit as a blurb, which is also neat, flows well, gives the reader a bit more to consider. I got stuck on “what she’s really good at…”. As a potential reader, I’d want a hint of what that skill is as a way to determine if the story is likely one I would be interested in (e.g. I read fantasy, but not crime novels).
I hope I’m not confusing the exercise for anyone, but I’ve set my dial on: One punchy / catchy sentence = book hook, and blurb to follow. Kinda like an appetizer followed by main course?.