MemberSeptember 30, 2020 at 2:07 am
IWRT! I can feel the suspense just from reading the blurb and the setting sounds interesting to me. My only recommendation is to consider changing the phrasing of “she died because of what happened that night all those years ago”. While I understand that its purpose is likely to pique the reader’s curiosity (what night?), it seems like too much of a tease. To my ear (and I’m just a reader, not an editor or critic), it would sound more natural if you changed “that night” to “one night”. Overall, though, this is a fantastic blurb.