MemberSeptember 24, 2020 at 4:39 pm
I like your hook, this is a book I would be interested in reading definitely.
I was thinking that it may help your hook if you split it into short sentences rather than one long one. It may be more punchy that way.
‘After her partner dies, Julep O’Neal inherits his retired K9 cadaver dog [name]. Unfortunately no one told [name of dog]. When he [?] decides to sniff out the murderer Julep’s Neighbour, he drags Julep along for the ride.’
Just a thought anyway.