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- MemberSeptember 24, 2020 at 2:49 am
hanks Kell and Pippa for your insights! Yes, it is more a blurb than hook. Remember in the Marks’ podcast when their guest speaks of how all successful blurbs seemed to start with “The girl who…” or “Gone girl…” or girl, something…?J
I was tossing and stewing about writing a better hook last night and got up at 3am to jot this down:
A girl fears that her hard-won magical Gifts have been corrupted by her terrifying encounter with the malignant Shadows inhabiting the Elanraigh’s subterranean caverns. Now her shining Gift of Knowing is overshadowed by self-doubt at a critical time when all she loves is in peril’s path.
Just kidding, guys— I realize I need to identify this as a high fantasy, so you’re right, Kell, it should read “A young noblewoman…”