- MemberSeptember 22, 2020 at 9:54 pm
Re the hat. Given the lack of context I’m starting to think that it may be best just to call the stranger’s hat ‘tall’ so it carries no particular connotations.
The point about starving and freezing is a good one. As is moving the mention of death to the final paragraph.
Lots to consider.
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