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    Brian Liew [YA-SF-GrimDark]

    September 13, 2020 at 11:57 am

    Hi Adam,

    While Laura didn’t say it outright, I agree that adding Barbara’s age is probably a good move given your target audience.

    Further, I agree with Laura that we don’t really know where the story takes place and from where she need to return home, but the ‘war between worlds’ probably implies enough and I like the succinct punchiness of the current one so much that it I think it might be better to leave that question unanswered rather than try to ‘shoe horn’ it in. Mark won’t mind, rules are meant to be broken Upside Down