MemberSeptember 13, 2020 at 9:47 am
Darren, thank you!
Pernickety is good – with so few words to work with, every one counts. So thank you for your feedback.
It’s not a fairy tale, but it draws on elements of them. The idea is that they’re all based on reality, but that reality is much worse and nastier than the stories would have you believe. If that didn’t come across then I need to rework it.
Good catch on ‘dying’ showing up twice – I missed that completely! And the other advice is great too, I’ll keep that in mind as I rework it.