- MemberSeptember 10, 2020 at 11:59 am
This is fab Robyn.
I didn’t know about the ‘Night Witches’ – just googled so I do now – so you may need to explain them v briefly. What a brilliant bit of history for a story!
It’s not immediately clear where the story is set or whether Grandma is still alive. I tripped up on Talia and Tasya too. Those points do become clear but they needed another read through.
The paras from ‘Rumours of a long lost treasure’ to ‘Colt knows how to find it.’ throw me off track a bit – I don’t think you need them. I’d also cut the last 2 sentences in Italics or maybe choose one of them?
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