MemberSeptember 7, 2020 at 8:08 pm
Hey Kell, IWRT! Very well done:)
I’ve been through divorce. So I feel for Rako. An idea. You say: nothing lasts forever, re: her divorce. Maybe you can echo that: …during chance encounter. And that power is going to be with her until death. Okay, maybe some things DO last forever.
A bit cheeky. depends what tone you want…
I’m wondering what the power is exactly? Or do you want to keep that a mystery?
Another question: Why are the monsters she’s hunting the only ones that can teach her? Wouldn’t they be enemies? Maybe you can convey why the monsters she’s hunting are the only ones that can train her and why would they do that… How does that work?