Hi Josh,
Great story idea, love the Chronicles of Narnia mashed with John Wick.
So for your first paragraph maybe something like;
In order to seek vengeance for the murder of her former colleague, Rhys Hoffman, Nia Fisher must return to the magical world of the Vanguard, but when her companions fail to steal the three fragments of the Hell Hammer in order to gain access to Andrew Church’s compound, all hell breaks loose. Fisher must fight her way through half of the Vanguard’s mercenaries and battle her own demons along the way, before Church kills her and her friends.
