Hi Jan – I quite like this. It’s clear and straightforward. Bert loves her father, the boat business and helping him out. I guess my main comment is that I can’t tell where the story is going from the first page – the ‘promise of the premise’? You suggest that there’ll be a big shake-up to Bert’s family soon, but this isn’t foreshadowed on the first page. I’m not saying it has to be here, but I’d prefer a hint of where this is going in the text.
