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    Liz Green

    October 6, 2020 at 3:39 am

    Hi Jan! Thanks for reading this and the feedback. I like the first sentence better than those that follow, too! So I’m sure they need some work.

    My thoughts were to have the first scene as “that moment” outside the door and most of the big moment, then flash back a week, move forward in time, then re-hit the opening scene at the end of Act 1. I know Mr. Stay isn’t a fan of the “one week earlier” thing, but I can’t help but think it’s the most gripping way to begin. So I’m going to try it and see what happens!

    My character has faced this black ice and miscarriage situations in her backstory and they impact how she behaves in the story.

    I particularly like your comment about how some of these sentences could apply to any story, so I’ll try and make them more specific. Thank you!