Reply To: Hunt or Be Hunted – Opening Line and Page 1

[Kell Shaw]

Thanks for the feedback; definitely will need to sharpen that first line and see about what I can do to evoke the city better. I’m trying to write tersely, as my epic fantasy writing was a lot more descriptive, but I think you’re right; just a few sharp entences here and there will make the place seem much more alive (which is important when trying to communicate an imaginary city! to the reader!)