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    Jan Carr

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    September 28, 2020 at 5:03 pm

    Great blurb Melissa! For me, it’s just missing one thing to make it really grab me.

    So third para:

    ‘Yet as soon as she steps foot on the property, she feels a sense of unease, as if the house itself is watching her, and WHEN… INSERT HERE THE REALLY SPOOKY/SCARY/DISTURBING SPECIFIC THING THAT HAPPENS AND THAT CONVINCES HER SHE’S MADE THE DEADLY MISTAKE quickly realizes she made a mistake…..a deadly mistake.’

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