MemberSeptember 28, 2020 at 12:45 am
This reads really well and had a lot of intrigue. I went back and had a look at your blurb to get more context and I just wondered if you could slip in something alluding to secrets/family secret. I know this is clunky but e.g. and Colt must fight to keep the most valuable pieces, and the truth, buried. You may not agree and I’d be interested to hear your thoughts because I’m finding it a tricky business writing the hook. That aside, very good as it is.