- MemberSeptember 27, 2020 at 12:43 am
Would definitely read that! Super intriguing.
But the first sentence is too long. You lost me part way through. Perhaps try splitting it differently? Does the reader need to know the grandmother died five years previously?
The second paragraph is great! Lots of hints that make me want to pick it up and read it.
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