MemberSeptember 16, 2020 at 11:37 pm
Hey Maryanne – way outside my genre here, but from what I know of romances, this works well. Everything is easy to understand and picture, characters are clear, and the premise and hook are set up perfectly (ie. the two lovers, the three boys for trouble and comic relief, and the ex that enters the scene to stir things up).
The only thing I would suggest is that the “Wesley Knight had it all planned.” as the start of the second paragraph sounds a little generic, when really he’s just referring to a cottage weekend. Perhaps something more specific about his plan for a relaxing and/or productive weekend?
Great job on this one!