MemberSeptember 8, 2020 at 5:14 pm
Thank you, Adam. Lots of points to ponder here, but so helpful to see where the sticking points are from fresh eyes!
The first paragraph was intended to introduce the series – the winter refuge doesn’t factor in until book 2.
I agree, a stronger hook is needed. I’ve been struggling with narrowing down the premise – there are a few themes fighting for dominance and I think it’s bogging down the story.