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    Kell Shaw

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    September 8, 2020 at 10:20 am

    Hi Denise

    I think this is a great set-up for a cozy mystery (and a dog sidekick makes more sense than some of those mysteries about sleuthing cats). The blurb is clean and clear – I’ve read it through and have a clear picture on what the book’s about, who the main protagonist and what’s going on, which is great.

    Main points are – how does Jules know that Mr Nelson was murdered? (This could be clearer).

    Also, that last line “Nevermind she doesn’t know what the hell she is doing” – this doesn’t seem to flow or work for me. Maybe “If only she knew what she was doing….”

    And is there a threat at all? Any pressure at all to solve the mystery? There doesn’t seem like any, so maybe add an impending sense of danger in or time pressure.

    Hope this helps.

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